#FiveSentenceFiction is a flash-fiction event hosted by Lillie McFerrin. She provides a prompt and participants post five-sentence stories – inspired by the prompt in some way – on their blogs. This week’s prompt is “shiver” and something about it triggered a memory of having read The Cyberiad by Stanislaw Lem, thus inspiring the following:
Sneakily, Sylvia stalks side streets.
Surreptitiously, she silences security.
Seething, she spies Spencer, Susan.
Spencer screams, surprised.
Shiver: Sylvia stabs Susan, spreading scarlet stains.
Splendid! Short, sweet, surprising!
Holy cow, that’s kinda cool, Lupus. Each line paints a very clear image. Great job!
Thanks. For the record, here is the bit from Stanislaw Lem that so inspired me:
This is a poem about a haircut! But lofty, nobel, tragic, timeless, full of love, treachery, retribution, quiet heroism in the face of certain doom! Six lines, cleverly rhymed, and every word beginning with the letter “s”!
Seduced, shaggy Samson snored.
She scissored short. Sorely shorn,
Soon shackled slave, Samson sighed,
Silently scheming,
Sightlessly seeking
Some savage, spectacular suicide.
Another thing that’s amazing about this is that Lem was Polish so, not only must he have done something quite remarkable in his original text, but also his translator performed quite a feat in translating it and keeping such a form.
Nice, very visual. Well done! 🙂
Very cool!
That’s really neat! Awesome job!
So different! good one!
This was very unique! I liked it.
What a brilliant idea! I loved the short and vivid writing, and the sssss’s made it very interesting.
Very well done! The only thing I like more than onomatopaeia is alliteration!